Is this the correct place to ask for help? I'm the host of an ongoing fantasy podcast with a modest following, looking for help refining some Greek wedding rites for characters to speak on air. As we have some Greek listeners, it's important to me to get it right.
I am writing a scene where two characters are reciting short wedding rites. Normally we just perform in English, but for this important scene, I want them to speak in something that represents their native language. The fictional country is extremely old and historically influential in the setting, so I decided to use Greek to represent it on air. The lines will be performed by me and one other co-host.
The particular family that the characters are marrying into has a reputation for being cruel. Therefore, their rites are intended to be sharp and possessive. Their marriage ritual is extremely simple - each person pricks their finger and lets a drop of their blood fall into a goblet of wine, and they drink it. They then take turns saying some simple call-and-response lines, something like,
"I give myself to you." "I take and consume you."
In English, it's something of a double entendre. Superficially it means "I accept and drink this part of your body," but contextually it means "I claim and take possession of you (through the blood I drink)". This is intentionally weird because of how unpleasant the specific family is meant to be.
A half-Greek friend of mine translated the following for me:
"Σου δίνω τον εαυτό μου." "Σε παίρνω και σε καταναλώνω."
However, he's not fluent, and said that it doesn't capture the concept of possession/absorption that the English variation conveys, nor is he sure that the tone sounds menacing enough.
Would anyone here be willing to look over my friend's translation and help me refine it? I'm open to modification suggestions, too, if there are cultural connotations I could possibly leverage. I know there will never be a 1:1 translation, but I'm hoping to find something which might evoke the same menace.
Because it's an audio show, I would also be extremely grateful if anyone could provide a slowly-spoken example of how to pronounce it. I could chuck it into google translate, but we all know that's not ideal.
Thank you to anyone who's taken the time to read this, and to anyone who's able to help.